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         <p>I have been working with computers for over twenty years and love to solve technical and business problems for a fair price.</p>
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-          I am a skilled and imaginative programmer with deep insight and excellent communication skills.
-          I pride myself on my own talents, but I am also a keen collaborator with colleagues in all aspects of business,
-          including other engineers, project management, sales and marketing, and leadership.
+          I am a skilled and imaginative programmer with deep insight and excellent communication skills&#11834;and
+          a keen collaborator with colleagues in all aspects of business, including other engineers, project management, sales and marketing, and leadership.
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         <p>
-          If you're already persuaded, <a href="#contact">let me know what I can do for you.</a>
-          Otherwise, you are very welcome to read on and learn more about what I might be able to offer.
+          <a href="#contact">Let me know what I can do for you,</a> or read on to learn more about me and what I might be able to offer.
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